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Maybe you could find a light instrumental and speak the poem over the instrumental in the background. Then you could edit it for video and post it up somewhere like youtube. I was into poetry once upon a time but the internet was never around in today's capacity to offer my poetry to more people who would care to listen.

Maybe try to focus more on what a word has for symbolism instead of using the word itself. That might make your standard a bit more creative in the future.

bonne chance. 😉

I actually dislike poetry, but most up my songs end up in that category anyways T^T

What does the second paragraph mean?

Merci :3

Hmmmm ...

Well, the theory is to speak of something that reflects love in the eyes and mind of the reader instead of speaking directly of what you want itself. This gives you a lot more sway to take the measure wherever you want to take it. For example you could talk about a dove flying north into ice and pain for example, and the reader will come to their own conclusions about what your symbolism would equate to in their mind. depending on the subject, love, war, hate, poverty, etc ... you then turn your words into a wider form of art where you have much more representation through words than you did previously.

It takes some practice but it becomes a habit eventually. Once you're good at it then it will start to get boring. That's when you should learn to play guitar or bass. 🙂

Oh... I get it. Took me some time, but I got it.

I rather learn piano. Piano looks fun 😃

It is a pretty poem, nice work 🙂

should have a poetry writing contest!

Sheo-kun says we might have one 😃

very good!

Well if its too short to be a song, you might want to take one of the verses in there and repeat it a few times throughout as a chorus. My personal suggestion for the chorus would be either the second verse or the fifth verse, however it is all up to your personal preference. Also adding a few breaks with either guitar/piano/whatever instrumentals you would like to use would definitely contribute to making it long enough to be considered an actual song, instead of a poem like you said your songs usually end up as.

I hope any of this is helpful

I'm such a bad songwriter XD

The chorus was actually the third verse.

It was verse-verse-chorus-break-verse-verse-break-bridge-chorus

Oh my god i didn't even notice the repetition of that verse in there, that's totally my bad for not realizing, but try adding that a few more times and maybe add in a few extra lines as filler? But you are DEFINITELY NOT a bad song writer, i actually really enjoy this

Should I change it from my original pattern to:

Verse-Chorus-Break-Verse-Chorus-Break-Verse-Chorus-Bridge-Break-Verse-Chorus

My opinion would be yes, but it all really depends on what style of song you want it to be, so there's that to take into account

It's a slow and (apparently) sad song 😮

Well if its slow, then you probably don't need quite so many choruses in there, as it will end up being longer than it would be as a rock song or something like that. Just figure out a way that you think it sounds good and do it 😃

Kz

Either way, It'll sound bad. I have yet to find a tune for it...

:3

Would you like to join the poetry competition 😃?

I'm a Politician, not a writer 😉

Why not be both 😃?

Poetry has never really been my cup of tea 😛

Tea is delicious...

I also get what you mean; I don't really like poetry...

Aye it is 😉

Needs pictures.

But it's a poem...

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I didn't realize you were even subscribed. It hardly matters if you are or aren't though.

I wasn't subbed. But now I'm double not subbed. You'll have to convince me twice over before I even consider subbing.

If people sub, I expect it to be because they like my work.

Good point. I most certainly do not.

What you feel about my work is irrelevant.

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